Rough Cut Edit Thoughts

I have managed to create a rough cut and put it in an earlier blog post.

Here are some overall thoughts on what worked well and what I feel should be improved for the Fine Cut:

Positives:
- The title sequence, I feel is successful with the picture fading to black and the text changing colour.
- The colourisation of the footage works well for the most part, creating a tone which I feel properly suits the subject matter according to each scene.
- Transitions between certain scenes work well together.
- The overall order in which events are shown works in order to tell the narrative.

Improvements:
- I need to give more links to the original sonnet, this could be done in the form of stock footage.
- Extra audio needs to be recorded to as to replace the silence and fill in certain plot holes regarding a character's actions or motivations.
- Sometimes the colourisation can effect the quality of the footage, sometimes creating more noticeable grain on darker images.
- I need to put more of a focus on the character who is mourning the loss of their friend as the cut still focuses more on the character who had become lost at the moment.
- Some of the edits are sloppy and should be remedied