Screenplay Feedback

I received my feedback for my first draft f the screenplay.

Here are some of the points made:

-I need to make sure that I am showing and not telling- I appeared to have given too much information through dialogue without any actions to prove that what the characters are saying is true.

-Make sure that my characters are consistent- My characters appear to be rather inconsistent with the way in which they speak and the type of language which I use. For example, my main character uses some foul language but the words he uses are inconsistent throughout, some words of which sound too polite for that character.

-Keep a consistent tone throughout the screenplay- The tone of my first draft was very inconsistent. It is meant to be a serious thriller but some events which take place lean more towards something that would happen in a comedy.

-Demonstrate the character's weakness/ why certain actions- I realised that my characters do certain things without any explanation. For example, the main character has a habit of talking to himself, but we only see this once or twice throughout and this can end p confusing readers.

A problem that has arisen with this feedback is that I am shooting on the same day as getting the feedback. However, I shall try to incorporate as many of the improvements that I can when shooting my two minutes worth of footage.